Judith Said:

GEN300 Discussion Question 2?

We Answered:

I think you have not asked a specific question here.

Sam Said:

Desperately needs a story idea!!!?

We Answered:

Story: (A long *** summary, please read the whole thing though, I didn't bother to edit)
You write about a person who is trapped, and due to the circumstances surrounding their being trapped (an avalanche, cave in, stuck on a desert island or they sustain an injury that will quickly kill them within a few hours before help arrives) they are likely going to die soon. They search their pockets hoping for a way to prolong their survival till help arrives and find an unfamiliar cellphone, but finds that it has no signal and the main character loses hope. A few minutes after being trapped the cellphone actually rings and they answer it, on the other end of the phone line is someone who tells them they have a chance to make three impossible cellphone calls (to anytime, to anyplace, and to anyone). The protagonist is in disbelief.
They first make a test call to a ex-lover (present) and have a lengthy conversation about the reason they broke up (fault of the main character due to their fear or cheating), the ex-lover is willing to take them back, but the protagonist realises that in the present situation in which they may die, that they may never go back. The protagonist just hangs up and begins to feel depression about the past and despair about their possible future. The protagonist vows to set things right and calls a family member who died a few weeks back (past), a family member they avoided speaking to and didn't bother to go to the funeral of, the main character called this specific family member due to the resentment towards them about not being supportive or being neglectful in their childhood so they can give them a piece of their hate filled mind. Their family member breaks down into tears over the cellphone call and admits their regrets about not being a very good family member, but over some angry yelling mixed with tearful sobbing they finally reconcile (the main character realises that they never actually tried to repair their relationship, and that their bad relationship was partially their fault). The main character decides to ask for some advice about their current dire situation, and the family member tells them that all they really need at the moment is a hope check. The main character hangs up and calls up someone who they converse with for a short time before laughing a bit, hanging up, relaxing and taking a sigh of relief, then falls asleep(the phone call and conversations is ambiguous till the last scene).
The main character wakes up in the hospital with ex-lover sitting beside them, the main character somehow doesn't seem confused by themselves being rescued, but how they were located and rescued...the ex-lover reminds the main character that their family member died a few weeks back, and that they had not attended the funeral and didn't recieve the letter that was left to them as part of their relative's will. The letter was instead given to the ex-lover instead to open (alternative written in the will by the family member), but the ex-lover was still recovering from their break up and could seem to open the letter. After the main character called them using the cellphone they built up enough resolve to open the mysterious letter which contained a warning about the main character's eminent death and detail with information about the disaster they were in, and because of some of the details that the main character gave to the relative that were written down, the rescue team was able to quickly rescue the main character by finding their exact location instead of digging/searching around blindly. The ex-lover fully reconciles with the main character and tells them that in the situation they were in, that they could only have survived being calm and not giving up hope/having a strong will to survive, they ask them how they were able to sleep during such a crisis, the main character tells them that they had a hope check then asks their lover if they found a cellphone in the same place as themselves. Their lover gives them a cellphone and mentions how it doesn't seem to work, but as soon as it enters the main character's hand it begins to ring, the main character answers it. The person on the other end is the main character themself, the main character on the cellphone asks the main character in the hospital if they really do survive, they both burst to tears laughing and the main character in the hospital looks to their lover and gives a simple 'yeah'.

Andre Said:

What do you think of my story?

We Answered:

First of all you need to begin to grab you audiences attention. Tell where the monkey is. Why is he there? Try get in his head. Watch videos of monkeys, and see how they act. Once I got the giraffe wearing the high-hell pumps i take it that this is an attempt at a narrative comedy. Don't do this...trust me. Unless your really funny, like a comic or something, don't, just don't. Your teacher probably won't find that funny, and actually tense up her mood while she's reading it.

Good middle. Nice plot progression. Well-laid out.

The ending was off a little. What happpens to the monkey at the end? Or the Transylvanian giraffe? Close the story better.

Hope this helped!