Carol Said:

Should I be realistic, or very creative in a college essay about improving a city?

We Answered:

You could do both. For instance, splitting your 'wishes' (bit fanciful already, there) between two sensible and one wishful one (pun intended).

Tara Said:

Please help me on my college application essay!?

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Barbara Said:

Would this paragraph be an interesting hook for a college professor?

We Answered:

It's got some really great imagery, the main thing I would suggest changing is the assumption at the top that swimming is a hell. That entire sentence or two about what people "think" about swimming should be deleted, talk about why YOU love swimming, it serves as a great metaphor to describe your personality and personal motivation in life, but it is out of place in the same paragraph to present such a strong negative argument against swimming and make the assumption of how other people think of swimming. They want to hear about YOU. The rest of it is beautfiul :)

Eileen Said:

Could you help me with my creative writing?

We Answered:

1. You need paragraph divisions. I counted four separate paragraphs there: your intro, the Camry incident, the invasion of the body odors, and your closure.

2. "You take a mental note that Toyota’s seem to be popular cars"--apostrophes are NOT for making plurals, but possessives. Take it out.

3. "Your eyes immediately shoot back to the rear view mirror and you see the driver of that same 2008 Toyota Camry is picking their nose. Not simply scratching it, but digging and scrapping for gold. Just before you think they must have the largest nostril in the history of the human race...." Twice in this passage you use the plural pronoun "their" with a singular antecedent--namely, the nose picker. You should use the singular "he" instead, even though the sex of the driver is never defined.

Americans are the only people in the world who have a problem with this, and for the life of me I don't know why. Singular pronouns are required for singular antecedents, period. A college professor will (and should) ding you big time for making that mistake.

4, As far as opening and closing, organization, creativity, gaining and keeping interest, and descriptiveness go, it's a good paper with a VERY valid point--one of which we need to be reminded more often!

Jon Said:

What is a creative work, historical figure or scientific achievment about which I could write an essay?

We Answered:

Thomas Jefferson or FDR the presidents
Vivien Thomas the black gifted lab tech who co-pioneered the first successful heart surgery. Dr. Blalock's assistant
http://www.medicalarchives.jhmi.edu/vtho…
Jesus Christ
Mohammad
Jonas Salk http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Jonas_Salk
Walt Disney
Ronald Reagan or JFK Starwars or moon dreams
Gandi
Mother theresa
nikola tesla en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Nikola_Tesla

Yvonne Said:

I need a creative title to my essay about losing a friend to drug overdose.?

We Answered:

Hello there,

Have you considered using Elton John's Candle in the Wind.

You might change it to something like Candle in the Wind . . . Joe Was Gone Too Soon.

The latter part you would change to fit what you are saying in the essay.

Good luck