Carrie Said:

Review my essay about Sicko please?

We Answered:

Good job...but a tad short for an essay? Do you have a certain character amount allotted? Hopefully your essay will help convince even one American that universal healthcare does not equal communism and can only benefit your people.

Diane Said:

People who work with adults with special needs or anybody who knows? Writing an essay and need some help! :)?

We Answered:

- If she's a UK citizen, she will be supported by her local council's social services.
- Social work teams who specialise in her disabilities (like occupational therapy, sensory disabilities) will be involved. If external agencies will be providing any other support, then they will be also be involved. She will have an assigned social worker who will co-ordinate the partnership.
- Within social services, information is shared through a central electronic database where client information is stored. The social worker provides external agencies with details of the services they need to provide for Fiona.
- Fiona will be assessed by a social worker and a package of support, tailored to her particular circumstances, will be put in place. The social worker then schedules regular reviews during which the services Fiona gets can be adjusted if there has been a change in her circumstances.
- Communication breakdown, lack of funding for adequate support, inadequate monitoring of services provided by external agencies...the list goes on. I suggest you do a bit of research.

Wanda Said:

Can someone review my essay?

We Answered:

You've got that you're hard working numerous times, so you should think about revising that.. Mmmm... You need to specify what EXACTLY sets you apart from everyone else who's writing for the same scholarship. You said you deserve it for many reasons, but you really didn't list anything that sets you apart from everyone.. N also I'd put I think I've earned a scholarship like this after doing *whatever you think that would've made you earned it*.. Keep the AP stuff in there cuz it makes you sound better and enjoy different challenges.. I'd probably use challenging myself as one of my main reasons for having earned a scholarship like that.

As for a conclusion.. The conclusion should summarize your essay up.. Since this isn't your final draft, I've no idea [=/