Jackie Said:

I need a title for my Scarlet Letter paper?

We Answered:

A Sinful Recipe For Love

Note: I would type the word "A"
in red instead of the normal black.

Jerome Said:

can anyone please check my college essay? its due tomorrow!!!!?

We Answered:

I don't think this is a strong college essay at all. First off, the prompt was to write page 87 of your autobiography. If this is a college essay (and not just an assignment for your high school teacher), you will bore the admissions officers to death. Moreover, you did not really follow the directions. Realistically a single page of an autobiography will not have so much general information about a person. One page would have a simple part of the person's entire life. Admissions officers have to read thousands of essays and you want yours to stand out. Most of what you've written can be composed by any student. It is filled with cliches and general life lessons that you don't show how they have real meaning to you. Definitely get rid of the quote("Necessity....") , your GPA and your name as the first sentence. You need to write something memorable that gives your complete application a personality. The best essays will be anecdotes- that is, descriptions of a part of your life that specifically describes something you did, learned, experienced, etc. That type of essay will set you apart from every other Indian who moved to the US and is now approaching high school graduation with an awesome GPA. If I were you, I would describe an experience you had in either India or the US and compare it to the other country. Tell the admissions officers how you dealt with the different cultures and people and how that experience has shaped you into who you are today. Admissions officers want to be able to read your essay and know, after reading it, what you as a person (not you as a number) can add to their university.

Based on what you have provided above, I think a great anecdotal essay would describe your everyday life and challenges in India compared to living in the US for the past two years. But again, be specific. Don't be general- i.e. Don't just say school in India is different than school in the US because...
Write something as a story and use LOTS of adjectives so that the admissions person reading your essay can envision in their mind what you have written on paper.

Good luck!

Erin Said:

Holiday Journalism Prompt?

We Answered:

Find out if any students/teachers celebrate Hanukkah or Kwanzaa and ask them about their beliefs. If they're not in the majority at your school or city/town, how do they feel about that? How do they establish a sense of community with others who celebrate their beliefs in a society largely dominated by Christmas celebrations?

Ask students and teachers what their New Year's resolutions are and print the most interesting/amusing ones.

Write a review of a newly-released holiday CD.

Take a photo of your meanest male teacher and print it next to a picture of Scrooge. (Kidding!!!!) :)

Ralph Said:

What would be a creative, interesting title for this story?

We Answered:

I may be too late in answering but here are some:
-"What Summer Taught Me" could be an interesting title depending on how you take it.
-"The Difference is Confidence" or
-"The Difference is a Stranger's Word."
-This one may be a bit long for a title: "Our Own Thought Can Hurt but Another's Word Can Heal."
-"All That Words can Do."
-"All it Takes is a Spoken Thought" or something around those lines.
-"The Cause May be Simple; The Effect Can be Great."

Those are just a few; each is kind of based on a slightly different perspective on your story. I like it by the way. :) Hope I helped!

Holly Said:

To all talented writers, and creative people...book help!?

We Answered:

Yes, I think your readers should learn about her 'gift' soon after she recieves it. Or at least hint that something is different right away and then reveal it in the next scene. Or show her dealing with it before she really realizes what it is.

So long as it happens soon after the accident or it might feel like a tacked on plot device and confuse people.

Claude Said:

First part of Chapter1?

We Answered:

Except for your mistake in using "fare" which should be "fair", wow!!!! It's really good. And I'm not saying this to flatter you or anything, but it's just really great. Wow again. Although it makes me smile that I read your work, you should not post these kinds of things on the Internet. Even though this is just your 1st chapter, you provided too much info for someone who will want to plagiarize your work. (Well, that couldn't be me because people who do that say, "Wow! Tell me more!")
I do want to read more, but I’ll just wait until it is published. (Tell me the title )
And oh, delete this, hurry!

Clinton Said:

can anyone look over my college essay for me?

We Answered:

First, get rid of all of the asides (the comments within brackets). It makes your writing sound immature. If it is an important point then include it in the sentence as a complex sentence. Next, include personal examples of how this character influences you or coincides with your life.